Wow, I really like this poem. I can't even pick a favorite line, there were just so many great phrases you use in this. Nothing sounds out of place at all, and it held my attention from start to finish (I know, it isn't that long, but I have a really, really short attention span). When you mentioned Kyo and Momiji was that a Fruits Basket reference? If it was that's really cool, I love Fruits Basket and it's very creative of you to incorporate it into a poem like this.

Though prehaps a bit personal the meaning isn't lost. Also in my humble opinion probably one of your best of your recent poems. Then again that's just my opinion but it the words fit nicely and nothing seemed out of place. Keep writing!

-TheFool