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| Amber Chorgan 2006-12-26 ch 2,  | Sorry, my computor is being retarded again and It won't let me join fictionpress. I saw the title of the second chapter and I was like O_o OMGE my emmy g is being weird again. But It actually made sense. XD ~shot~ I'm glad you made a separate story for Stacy like I hoped you would. Its a little more detailed than what you had before, but its still...uh... you. I could tell you were watching Kino's Journey when you were writing the begginning. Its like the beginning of that and the railroad scene made me think of that too. lol. Overall, the story seems to be more thoughful and calmer than Silver Midnight. I think I'm liking this a little better than SM. Though I think the characters of SM are more lovable, I think this storyline seems a little less cliched. |
| Snip2r 2006-12-24 ch 1,  | A silhouette does not show colour, they won't know that she's dark skinned...though that could just me being picky. Your description and choice of word is...unusual. Not necessarily bad. Just make sure people understand them, na? I could see this as an outline, but not a written story per say. Your description are very detailed, almost like you're making a note for yourself. That might have been the case. Enough about your writing though. Your story definately have a hook to it. Both the title (I didn't bother checking the summary :P) and the introduction. "Why are we still here? Why didn't he destroy us?" Makes you wonder doesn't it. Seba and Stacy are likeable characters, and I liked the ending of the second chapter very much. If you have any of your graphic novel done, I would be interested in reading them. You got a website where you post them? |