   review 2008-01-12 . chapter 1first chapter is alluring. reading the second now. |
 the-Imagined 2007-12-04 . chapter 24oh dear |
| the-Imagined 2007-12-04 . chapter 23 im reviewing! |
 Sweet123 2007-12-03 . chapter 22what happened to Cael |
| Sweet123 2007-12-03 . chapter 21 love.
You dont need to improve anything but picking a target audience because sometimes the language switches between teen and pre-teens |
| Sweet123 2007-12-03 . chapter 20 cael?? |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-29 . chapter 22 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-29 . chapter 21 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-29 . chapter 20 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-11 . chapter 19 o.O nice cliffie!
you should put a line when the time switches because it will evade those few minutes of confusion when you switch times and places with no warning. |
 Jinx 2007-11-09 . chapter 19 Cool story |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-02 . chapter 9 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-01 . chapter 8 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-01 . chapter 7 im reviewing! |
| the-Imagined 2007-11-01 . chapter 6 im reviewing! |
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