again with the depressiveness. write something happy!! really. i think you should become a song writer. very good poem.
autho person/shaggywolf

Wow... depressing story! I could totally see you rapping this, though... It reminded me of MacBeth, with washing away the blood

o, ah
*bows down to poet with skills i lack*
i like how you combined the sad and more graceful tone with the kinda jarring "hand me a sponge" thing...it sounds like the speaker actually has some sense of purpose, not feeling sorry for herself. instead of "you hit me, now what do i do" it's "you've really hurt me, now i'm doing something about it."
i like it!