 Dani P 2006-12-25 . chapter 1I didn't really like this poem, though I used to be a volleyball player myself. The last lines "The name of the game, is volleyball." is cliche.
The purpose of a poem is to show a different view on s known topic, and to captivate the reader. If you find a new spin on how to convey your feelings to the game, and choose your words more carefully, and avoid cliche phrases it could be a good piece.
I wish you luck, and hope you will try again (this review isnt meant to discourage but to help you improve) |