OH MY GOD!! THEY'RE DEAD! Ding dong, the wicked witch is dead! Very nice! I like the cliffhanger you leave us with. I'm excited to read on.

Evil authro! Now I have to wait to find out what happens next! I like this chapter. I think that Jake is a little farther up the suspect list than Cley thinks...

Wow, wonderful. The pace isn't too fast, so we have plenty of time to soak up the details of the story, which is so cool. I'm tied into it now. (Maybe it'll eat me.) And Jacob Livingston? Hmm...

"This statement hit me like a Mack truck" haha...I love this, and will continue reading, like, right now. I almost felt that Josh's phone call was a little random, came from nowhere. Other than that, nice.

Your story is off to a great start and I'm looking forward to seeing a bit more. You are very descriptive and definitely know what direction your story is headed in while keeping the reader in the dark. Keep up the good work!

this story reminded me od twilight? did you base any of this on that book? i liked this and i cant wait for more!

Jacob Livingston? huh. very... creative... you've got very... creative... names.

sorry, i meant 'plot'.
i read your story a few more times by the way.
i have A LOT to learn from you.

W-O-W.
the style of your writing is really good. I can see that you have a good plat and firm grip over your story.
Also, you make a reader want to keep reading on. That is VERY good. keep it up and update soon!

I'm so interested...I need to know the rest of the story. It's cool how you brng us in on the situation without knowing everything, but then you reveal it to us. Update soon!

I love the chapters being short and sweet. You've got great talent. update soon. awesome story.
care to review my story-Camp Summerville?
-Vandana.

you're suprizingly discriptive, write more i can't wait. I'm used to it being spelled Chloe though, but you're the author...