I have this horrible habit of never being able to express myself well in reviews-a habit I'm not sure I can break. I've only read two of your poems so far, but I can tell you are insanely original/creative and I like your style already.

This is great.

You have an AMAZING talent for this. You have origninal rhymes and original ideas. Its very hard to create something modern, with slang and raw emotion, and still maintain a decent rhyming scheme. Its incredible.

Your poetry is lovely and catchy and raw and intense. i love it.

cool i think i know who you are...lol i hope i do. anyway such a sweet narrative. nice work.

(I'm loving your new pen name, by the by). The whole idea of "psycho(somatic)" is excellent enough to warrant a rave review, so do not be surprised by my sychophantic truckling. :) I love the bitter, contemplative aura of this, exemplified in "since impatience was bred from his greed" and "What a gift!/What a talent", since you've pulled it off without sounding snobbish or trite (an accomplishment in itself). There is a narcissitic undertone that complements the whole thing nicely. But again, it all comes back to the excellent title that is just plain brilliant. Okay, I'm done blathering now. `~bella~`

Dead on formatting.

"So panic! He rules fickle hearts/While he deals out his cards/With an impossible bluff" I really like that. The character kind of reminds me of The Phantom of the Opera... it's got that weird dark attraction to it.

"And he can’t trace the original :b r e a t h . o f . l i f e: Because he’s got no feel. He’s psycho(somatic). And their thoughts aren’t real; They’re just part of his static." I love that the best. Especially the "breath of life" line, mostly because it looks so pretty. Also 'cause it fits perfectly.

Great work! I like your style.

I have to say, the thing that struck me the most here is the outline, and how each line doesn't nessecarily end with a comma or a period. It still flows, and the accenting with the italics and bolding is very well done! The writing was wonderful too... this is really great! Keep writing! (oh, and thanks for the review!)

This poem still reminds me of Heathcliff from "Wuthering Heights"...

Especially this part:

"He rules fickle hearts while he deals out his cards with an impossible bluff, but the girls don't notice the game, and his word is enough to make them smile the doubts away."

So of course I like this, especially since it reminds me of my most favorite book! ^_~

.:*§*:. Calliope Veronica .:*§*:.