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| J.E.Wyatt 2007-01-18 ch 1,   | Oh wow, lovely first chapter. They way you described Jacqueline was utterly breathtaking. The way you depicted her . . . I'm not surprised why Nikkie had been entranced by her. I must compliment your writing style as well. Very poetic in a way; and very elegant! But gez, I was rather disappointed at the end of this chapter, that the Duke was breathing all over Jacqueline, lols. I thought this was going to be a romance between Jacqueline and Nikki! Or perhaps it is? Oh, I can't even begin to imagine what this secret between Jacqueline and the Duke can be! Please, do update! -J.E.Wtatt |
| A.J Evans 2007-01-08 ch 1, | Intriguing start! This period of history is an interesting one so I'm interested to see what you will do with it! It also makes a refreshing change to see someone writing in first person, and you do so well. I like the language you use as it adds that element of romanticism that is often associated with this period. I look forward to the next chapter |
| ind-fam 2007-01-03 ch 1, | Interesting ... |
| faery tragedy 2006-12-28 ch 1, | What I've read I like. The complicated relationship between Ranthulfe and Jacqueline is interesting, but bordering a little on bodice-ripper. Nikki's character is well-crafted. And I like your language a lot. It's easy to read without being too sparse. "You realize, love that" I think you missed a comma there. Other than that, please write more. *faery tragedy |
| Vixen of Vienna 2006-12-26 ch 1, | Lovely. You have very sensual and luscious descriptions. Although your characters seem a bit too perfect ... I like this very much. Do continue. |