Excellent essay. Well written and thought provoking on three levels. The first level was about censorship itself. Dominant segments of society have always been attempting to censor the more dissident members since the beginning of civilization. This is why history books don't often tell the entire story. Whoever wins the war writes the book. Secondly, the sensitivity issue not only shows that our government is getting involved in things they shouldn't, but that American society is soft. We've become so rich, fat, and happy that whenever there is a ripple in the pond, people go crazy. The Justin Timberlake/Janet Jackson scenario was a good example. There were two seconds of a brown spot on the camera. Third, though censorship spans over all of U.S., it tends to be more targeted at media that would reach mainstream audiences. I inferred that from what you said about censoring John Lennon, Rage Against the Machine, and Sugar Ray. I'm a big fan of heavy metal and know that a majority of Americans do not listen to it. It's not a coincidence that contemporary heavy metal does not feel the bite of censorship like other mainstream genres do. I'll give you some examples of songs that might tick the government or society off, but don't receive much attention:

Lamb of God - Now You've Got Something to Die For (anti-Iraq War)
Slayer - Angel of Death (Auschwitz/Joseph Mondel)
Pantera - anything they've ever put out (laced with "**")
Children of Bodom - Follow the Reaper (suicide)
Megadeth - Blackmail the Universe (world war)
Avenged Sevenfold - M.I.A. (anti-Iraq War)
Mudvayne - Silenced (anti-censorship)

Stay out of the limelight and you become untouchable. Again, excellent essay and I hope your professor gave a good grade.

A well-written essay with only minor syntax errors. Sometimes your quotations disrupt the flow of the sentence because of when you choose to insert them. For example:

Censorship not only infringes upon one’s First Amendment rights but also “…is the denial of another’s freedom to choose”.

This would be better formulated had you written instead:

...First Amendment rights but is also "the denial of another's freedom to choose".

Minor inconsistencies like this tend to build up a little over the course of the essay, making it harder to read than it should be.
The use of the quotation from Grey's Anatomy, while it may be witty and contemporary, makes you seem unprofessional because of it's irrelevance.
All the references to the corporations and numerous examples were well placed and well used; most of them added a strong base to your argument. The only thing I would suggest would have been a study of the psychological effects of negative lyrics and visual content on children and adults as well. While you do support your argument that the banning of certain artists is unacceptable, you don't do a very good job of supporting the alternative: giving parents full control over their children's viewing and listening material. Of course, it's understandable if you had a word limit, but if this was the case, I would have to suggest cutting down on the examples and strengthening the binaries of your argument.
Other than those few things, well executed. Hope you got a good mark!

This essay had some very interesting views in it. Though there were some things that I didn't feel fully agreeable with, I found myself wanting to finish it from the minute I began to read it.

A great essay to say, I agree with you to a certain extent about the government censorship, and parents having the say so as what their children should watch. The way you bring your facts together is very nice, effectly so. You explained your thoughts with excellent proof and proficiency.

But still, in disagreement to what you wrote, there are several irresponsible parents who allow their children to see and hear anything. Profanity, nudity, racial comedy, crude humour. All of which shape the child into who they will be, even though we think the influence isn't great it is. I know first-handly from being allowed to watch television shows and movies rated for adults.

We have many examples: Children who thought they could do what was done on South Park and come back to life as Kenny does.

Children who watch wrestling and think the moves done on it are safe enough to try on others.

Girls who see Real World, The Hills, My Super Sweet Sixteen, and The Bad Girls Club, and think they can live like that- be like them.

Many of which show television's effects. In honesty, I think we need a more strict censorship upon television, from the parents and the government.

Yet, great essay. Especially the exampling.

~M.S.

I think the government does well in introducing certain kinds of censors. You have no idea how many irresponsible parents go around their kids without teaching them what's right and what's wrong. If the government didn't do this kinds of things, who knows, maybe a couple of kids would kill a classmate and think it's perfectly normal. Hey, it was on TV. It's normal.

A good essay, yet I don't personally agree with it entirely.
cheers
jp
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Wow, I love the way you are sucked into the essay at the beginning. I can see where you are coming from, but I can also see where censorship could also be an evil necessity that, at certain times, must be used. There is a proper time and place for everything, especially when you are dealing with (possibly) young children. You feel very strongly about this topic, and it shows. A thought invoking piece that can really make people stop and think about what is going on. I hope to read more from you soon about other topics.

Lady_DreamWriter (member of Reviewers_Found)

First off, this IS the essay section, so you sound kind of stupid in your summary.

Other than that though, this was a well written essay. I somewhat agree with you, somewhat not. I think censoring music is kind of stupid, people should know what certain bands and the stations who play them, well, play, and should listen according to how they feel about that. As for TV, though, I see nothing wrong with censoring explitives and nudity. There are people who are offended by that, and while I normally hate anything that is done a certain to not offend people, this is something I agree with them on. A lot of parents don't want their kids to hear rude language or to see some celebrity's tit when they watch a football game. And I think the TV networks need to respect that; not everyone is indifferent to that kind of thing.

Have a nice day.