That was an awesome story. It a nice dark tone to it. I thought it was cool when he told his friend to go ahead and do it.

SirScott

I really liked this. Very well written and with a great plot to it.

"It was like I had just made the best business deal in the whole world, but then didn’t get any money out of it. It was a rip off."

That was my favorite. "Poison with a heartbeat", was quite clever. I would have never thought of anything like that.

I enjoyed reading that. Even though it was short, it was better then a lot of the one shots that are just as long as a 30 chapter story. It doesn't have to be long to have a meaning, be interesting, really reel someone in. And this story proves it. Great job.

wow. that left me thinking. and i love stories that leave me thinking. there are some strong points and ideas. i LOVE these lines "They say when you work hard you get rewarded, but I wasn’t. Life’s awful, isn’t it?" and "I am poison with a heartbeat". kudos to you!