Reviews for lessons 1 and 2 - FictionPress.com

Tytherpol 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseit's cool how it is, but you are right--it's incomplete. here's what i would do if it were up to me on where to take this (and, if under these circumstances, i couldn't change much else) i would add lines under each two lines. like "greed does not consume men/but it leads them/up hills and into sunken...whatever" and add another line or two after each one. but whatever please tell me what you think about my suggestion/why it you do or don't like it. yours. -ty.
darkink1991 2007-01-29 ch 1,	abuseI like it. You siad you didn't know where to go with it but i don't think you really need to go anywhere ealse with it. I liek it the way it is, but it's your writting... I like that you change the common conseption of what things do but i tin it reveils a real truth.
iceis007 2007-01-07 ch 1,	abuseLeave it how it is! I like ...
She-Loves-Someone 2006-12-25 ch 1,	abuseWow. Good job. I especially enjoy the last section of the poem - I never thought of this before, but you're right. Both of the things you said are true. As for the whole issue of finishing this, it almost seems as if there needs to be a final (fifth?) thought in the end. But I don't know. I didn't write it.