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| chasingcars101 2007-03-14 ch 7,  | abuseI really hope you do an epiloge and please do another story! |
| chasingcars101 2007-02-28 ch 6, | abuseyour welcome, please update soon, i cant wait to see where this is going! |
| chasingcars101 2007-02-06 ch 5, | abuseOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG! that evil bounty hunter is gonna capture her! ARG! Please update soon! |
| chasingcars101 2007-01-27 ch 4, | abuseThat was great, cant wait to see what happens, this is really awesome! |
| chasingcars101 2007-01-14 ch 3, | abuseThat was awesome, i loved it how you swapped between the bounty hunter and Rachial! Evil cliffie! Please update soon |
| chasingcars101 2007-01-09 ch 2, | abuseGreat 2nd chap. please update soon |
| GilanSalehi 2006-12-30 ch 1, | abuseI like the premise of this story. Quite imaginative and definately interesting--this story has great potential. The problem right now is that lack of editing is holding this story back. I'd look back through it and check for errors. Some that I picked up while reading were that you mixed up steel/steal and wear/where. Also, try to keep all the narrative in the past tense (you switched to present tense at some point), it helps with the continuity and flow of the language you use. You've a written a lot for one chapter, so its probably a headache to edit the whole thing, but if the writing is easy to read and mistake-free, more people will get through the whole first chapter and review. Best of luck with this story! Keep at it! |