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| miss-ellen 2007-04-15 ch 1,  | abusehey this is really cool and relatable :D very muchly enjoyed |
| Charity F 2007-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI think the last line might be the most powerful... And i also think you've done a great job with this. but i don't know whether it was how you wanted it to be but i feel as if the lines, the stanzas - - there's something missing. i don't know, i can't really explain it. That's why i'm wondering if it's meant to be like that. the lines themselves feel to be detatched from each other?! i dunno. Just my thoughts. |
| simpleplan13 2007-02-04 ch 1, | abusethis is very bittersweet and beautifully written... I like the time concept... great poem |
| His Mercy's Waiting 2007-01-25 ch 1, | abuseWow that was so sweet...and so beautiful. This review sounds really stupid and unhelpful, but I'm at loss to anything else. :) |
| Maranwe Telrunya 2007-01-07 ch 1, | abuseVery pretty... I like the bittersweet feeling to it. |
| Aquafied 2007-01-06 ch 1, | abuseit reminds me of an older women touching a younger romance of her own |
| Leaving Here 2007-01-05 ch 1, | abusewow. sad but fabulous. Liz |
| review 2007-01-04 ch 1, | abusei know exactly what you mean. im not kidding. ive been through it. in the not-so-ancient past. this is going on my favorites. it really speaks to me. you probably get comments like this all the time, but i just want you to know that this is real. to me. |
| The Postscript 2007-01-02 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, absolutely touching. "I can say goodbye without tears." is a really intriguing line with the rest of this poem. Strength . . . or numbness. In the stanza, I could see it the latter, but the rest of the poem alludes to the joy and happiness -- time has healed. This is very touching to me because a friend and I parted ways a long time ago, but it was a very bitter "look off into opposite horizons". Time has worked in us now, but everything it has left in both of our hearts . . . it can be exhausting at times. Anyways, wonderful work. Beautiful write. Keep writing, k. |