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What the hell? ... This was ... oh my god ... lots of nonsense, I suppose. There were several times I just wanted to stop reading and go find something else ... but I didn't ... still not completely sure why. Some part of me just couldn't go up and press the back button, so I went forward instead. ... And I suppose Cole grew on me ... in his ... own ... very weird way ...

I think my brains melted ... In a good way ... I think ...

I can honestly say that I have never read anything like this before ... and I want to read the sequel ... but I think I'll wait until it's completed. For some reason, I don't think my brain will let me continue reading if I try to do it chapter by chapter.

Sorry, this really isn't meant to be a flame. I liked it. It was a fun (if different) read. Definitely not my usual.

good luck with the Sequel
Allanasha Ke Kiri

Wow. Love Ashton, almost hate trent, used to love Vincent, and cole? He's freakin amazing.
You are totaly my idol now! I wish my stories were half as good as yours cos that'd be awesome. Yeah, they aren't though. Ugh im a totaly pity party at the moment. SEE WHAT YOU'VE DONE TO mE?

Love how you're attacking this story :)

Entertainment with a capital E!

'I hate apples.

I hate how they just scream GERMS at you.

Especially, when you're in the supermarket and they're in that pile ontop of eachother like they're having a ** fruit orgy and people touch them with hands full of uncleanliness. They're disgusting. As is all touchable fruit. Everything should be in a can. You know what I also hate? Saturdays. Saturday is the day that I have to go to the supermarket to buy the germ-filled fruit for my workaholic Aunt and her **. Half German Shepherd, half dinosaur **. But, back to the fruit for a minute, you know how AIDs started? Some ** from another country brought an apple on a plane. He shoves this apple into his pocket and it's on the plane so germs are everywhee and they all go to the apple. It's like there's a sign above the apple, "PARTY AT MY PLACE!". Colds and flus and weird diseases copulating on the fleshy fruit. He gets off in Austin, Texas and BAM. AIDs to your ** door. It's communism with the mask of anarchy. It's a revolution of fruit and they're out to ** get you. One bite at a time.

So, hi. I'm Cole.'

Brilliant. You are ** brilliant, man. (:

oh babe you made me laugh so much with this story that i feel really bad now that is over.
er, well, first to say, i'm french, so forgive my english, i'm not sure i can write it well. okay, i'm sure i can't but i'm doing it for you, i'm trying to help you to reach the 10 reviews, so please, you'll criticize my english another time.
and now, i also feel like i need to say that you're insane. at first, not so much, though i was seriously confused quite often, but i don't know what the ** happened to you but the story went really really crazy. and i was confused. like, more. like a lot.
but it was so ** good and i was like ohmygodiwantyoutobemybff or ohmygodiwanttobecole and ohmygodihopethiswilastforever and, well, you can see my point, i was all ohmygodsomething.
your characters are awesome. i think they change a lot through the story, becoming, er, you know, like superfreakingweirdos but i'm in love with them all. er not all. ashton confused me a lot (yes i know it's easy to get me confused, but that's beside the point and you were clearly not helping me not to be. if that makes any sense since, you know, my not-being-english thing). i didn't like that much last chapter for that reason, because i was missing cole POV. well, since you actually finish with his POV i dn't know why i am complaining. oh, and in fact, i really like how last chapter remember us of prologue, because as i said i felt like the characters and the story went all crazy and it makes the whole thing more coherent.
god. i woulld like to say so much more because your story really made my week, and i want to stalk you now (that's a compliment), and you're really awesome and i love you and stuff, but i fell a bit confu... AWKWARD when i write reviews so. yeah. i'm done. just know that i loved your story a lot, even though i didn't manage to say you all what i wanted to.

I love Cole's character. I've never fallen in love with such an odd minded character before. The way he thinks had me laughing until the end. Awesome story!

I am very excited right now. I have succumbed to the lure of FictionPress...and I am very glad that I did. XD

I wanted something amazing to read...and I found it. Now off I go...to read the rest!!

*beats up naked penguin fetus for pope... applies hello kitty sticker on her?his? forehead* dont worry...we still love you. lol i feel bad b/c i didnt know there was going to be a sequel so. still one of my favoritests! :D adios

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Yes.

'She laughs. It sounds like she's giving a **.'
THATSWHYI**INGLOVEYOU

omfg...i can't believe i just said that..but anyway its about gd time that ash and cole got together...i just found this story yesterday and have been having mood swings because of this stupid story...well it really isn't stupid it is just infuriating...i hate cole totally and completely...and not just because he talks to himself more that i talk to myself...i mean i held the crown for it and now he just steals it right in front of me...does he have no shame...i just woke up to finish the story so you'll have to excuse my random psychoness or not...anyway love the story and hope that cole can keep from f!@#ing this relationship with ash up...o and i love the stupid(not really just needed an adjective and thats my default) sappy scene. the entire part from ash talking to his mom to the end it was just so CUTE

Ha! this is amazing!

Hi,

I read your story, just now, all the way through and I just wanted to leave a note. To tell you I liked the story. That I enjoyed reading the storyline (and the smut, haha)

Just a small remark: a couple of storylines see to stop suddely.
- Ian: one chapter they act like bunnys, then all of a sudden he's only mentioned at graduation
- The blackmailing dude. What happened to him? He didn't contact slutty Cole.
- The other dude with a C, his old boyfriend... that storyline seems unfinished.


Besides... why apologise for having a life outside writing FP stories? :)

Hahaha it was hilarious. Way over the top but in a hilarious way. The stylistic break in the end was... abrupt. That backstory could have been worked in more throughout instead of allatonce and with a different POV? I don't know. It did make me like Ashton better, though, so I guess it worked ok. Also, I know you wrote this a long time ago and it's basically fantasy but SERIOUSLY. When he gets shot and then it up and screwing within like a week? I can promise you that after getting your inside bits all torn up and sewn back together even walking is difficult after a week. Cole would have herniated every organ ever if he really did all that stuff. Anyway, that really bugged me, and all the pedofilia was uncomfortable to say the least, but Cole was such a fantastic and well-drawn character that none of that mattered. I hope you're not lying and there is a sequel because I am checking RIGHT NOW. Woo!