Reviews for When I think about you

Reviews For: When I think about you

The Postscript 2007-08-22 ch 4,	abuseWow. I like the depth of this, especially closer to the end. You do a great job of developing character and imagery in a short time. Awesome write - keep it up, k.
An Inside Joke 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseYou established your charecters very well, although Sal's freak-out thing seemed to come out of nowhere. Maybe you could have had the narrator be uncertain about buying something right before or something like that to set her off.
The Postscript 2007-01-11 ch 3,	abuseGreat chapter. The beginning part reminds me of a quote somewhere, that a person can feel good about themselves for a long time on a single compliment or act of kindness they recieved. Keep writing, k.
boo 2007-01-08 ch 3, anon.	abuseu know out of all that happened between u and S i didnt think u were gonna pick this one to write about. lol when i read the first few lines i thought it was about the time u fell, but then i saw "ami"
boo 2007-01-08 ch 1, anon.	abusesal? o_O;
His Mercy's Waiting 2007-01-07 ch 2,	abuseI have to say, I really like the title. The story has real potential, especially in the open way you introduce the characters to your audience. The only thing that bothered me was reading that whole italicized segment, but it's not your fault. Keep writing!
Aquafied 2007-01-07 ch 2,	abuseseems like that innocent silly a child has
The Postscript 2007-01-07 ch 2,	abuseGood second chapter. I know there have been countless of times friends have pointed out what I don't see myself. Beautiful end, especially "As time goes by, it will always be enough". Wonderful work. Keep writing, k.
Aquafied 2007-01-04 ch 1,	abusecute but my christmas spirit died
The Postscript 2007-01-02 ch 1,	abuseThe line the other reviewer mentioned I also found a little awkward - but at the same time with an element of deep comfort to me. Perhaps it is correct and I am simply not farmiliar with the order you chose to put it in. Interesting write. You certainly leave it open to all sorts of different ideas with how vauge it is - almost as if there is an idea you have that you are not sharing with the reader in this piece. Intriguing. Keep writing, k.
a bitter kiss. 2006-12-27 ch 1,	abuseAt first I thought the one with Sal was a guy, but in the end when I read Sal said the word "him", I thought, the person with Sal is a girl after all? I liked how it ended though. “Nothing will being, nothing has begun before, so why will it now?” Hmm, I like the line, but doesn't it seem a bit grammatically incorrect? Oh, I won't be the best person anyway. I suck at grammar. Great piece. Happy Holidays!

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