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| Misunderstood Misfit 2007-01-04 ch 1,   | gave me shivers a bit but its very good and interesting poem =) |
| Flavia K 2006-12-28 ch 1, | Oh gave me shivers... Lines that were strong: 1,7,11,13,19 Lines that could be improved: 3,6,10,12,15 I think by maybe tweaking those lines you could develop the meaning a bit more, and maybe try to stay away from excessive repetition, but leave it for places where it gives it an added effect, the less you use it the more surprising it is and the more effective. Yeah that's all I can think of to say, keep up the good work! ^_^ |
| Mocking Laughter 2006-12-28 ch 1, | Um...interesting...great poem! |