Loved it. The overall quality was dense with impure thoughts and ripe with questioning morals and principals. And the relation of humans to animals (or maybe...the lack there of) added a certain bittersweetness to the already rough yet cinnamon layered texture of indecent, and also, tempting aroma of leather that I couldn't help but think about the whole way through :)

yes...

this is a neat poem.
"where mating calls and feathers rise/up in moist swirls" -- that is a definitely colorful line.
and "the lion king and his cobra queen"
...the alusions in this are great.
nice job.

this plays out well- the words match nicely together. but if i had to choose a favorite part of this it would be "and the slur in her throat..."- that was brilliant.

Great imagery and metaphors, I loved hom the animal motif was continued all the way through. Full of power, lust, and beauty.
Very nice, as usual.

she can't think,
swan neck pouncing left and right
as her head says "no, no" ...
"i didn't mean to do anything bad" but
those rooster red lips stay close
and touching, because she knows-
"no, no", she knows even good girls
have sin in their blood.


that is quite quite quite gorgeous. the whole poem is SO rich in imagery, it's crazily evocative and wonderous. such an original idea, too, love it.

Wow, I love this picture you've painted. All these animals, and even where there weren't animals, you managed to use animals in the description, like in "rooster red lips." I love that because I've never heard it before, and it's also a very apt description. I also have to commend your line break in "maybe that's just another lover in the family/room on the other side of the closed door" because until you get to "room," you assume we're talking about family. Very nicely done. Overall, a very well-crafted poem. Keep writing! :)

The imagery in this is just astonishing. I loved how the rhythm was just right and how this was chock-full of metaphors. Great job.