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XxAntagonistxX 2008-05-23 ch 1,	"You told me, I’ll love you For a little while, Because I know Even in Wonderland Forever is a lie." I absolutely loved that verse. good poem.
cheesypotatos 2007-08-28 ch 1,	I love all the allusions from Alice in Wonderland it was totally creative. You know how to be so romantic in such a pesimistic way, but happy endings are so overated anyways. The saddness creates such beauty in this poem. Please keep writing I love your poems.
sex on the boulevard 2007-03-13 ch 1,	I love it! It's whimsical, beautiful, romantic, and sharp. It's great!
TheStarsAreFading 2007-01-17 ch 1,	Thanks for reviewing my piece--I thought it would be only fair if I checked out some of yours. This poem is amazing. There's really not much more I had to say. It's really fantastic, I love the idea of it; it's really creative. Nice job. =)
Bonfire Of The Sanities 2007-01-16 ch 1,	Wow...you've written a lot of good stuff...but this may well be the best...I love everything about it!...its easily the best thing i've read in a long time...excellent work! Peace,love,rock and roll: Ben
cling peach 2007-01-15 ch 1,	There really is a lot of Alice themed poetry around here, I think I'm going to have to conform soon and write one of my own! I like the twist with this one- most of them focus on Alice and her insanity (or whatever) but this one brings a boy into it. Which is good, there's always a boy, or a girl, or some kind of heartbreaker disguised as a lover. "You condemned me with that Cold cheshire grin" Maybe it's the alliteration, but something makes me love that line. "Kissing you is the most fatal of all" was my favorite, though. Just very... true. It's like, there's all these crazy hurtful things in the world, and you have the power to really destroy me, but it's my fault because it's not your kiss that's fatal, it's the fact that I kissed you. Alice always blames herself, doesn't she. Ahem, sorry. Alice brings out the poetic insanity in me. Great ending, keep writing. :)
Sarah's State of Grace 2007-01-09 ch 1,	Wow! I don't even know where to begin! That was wonderful! no, better then wonderful! Awesome, great, perfect! This could make a great song! I love it! Wonderful job! :) ~Crazygirl91~
CrazyTurtles 2007-01-05 ch 1,	Aww heartbreaking. I like it a lot tho. My friend has a saying she loves, "even roses have thorns." This kinda made me think of that.
spiderfly 2007-01-04 ch 1,	I love the story behind this, and the way you make it link with alice in wonderland. Some of it is a bit cliched, like 'forever is a lie', but I guess that gives it its heartbreak charm. I like the italics. I especially like 'Don't cry little Alice, you said, Or you'll drown us all'. At the end I like using both of the words 'perfect' and 'heartbreaking' together, as they seem so contrasting. But it is a bit teenage angsty. But I guess that's what it is. I don't know. Anyway, this is just the kind of poem I like. Good job!
Enigmatic Night 2007-01-04 ch 1,	Hey this was nicely written, it seems to tell a story within a short poem. Some poems just portray emotion, others tell a story that gives the reader something to feel emotion over. Um.. I hope that made sense lol, I mean... you made the reader feel what you were quite possibly feeling or what you wanted them to feel. It was a nice twist on a fairytale, sending the reader into some sort of 'crafted' abyss... like we too fell with 'Alice'. However there were some areas where the words seemed to be a tad bit disjointed... "Painted the roses red with blood because White never was my color." I liked that line very much, however I reckon the second bit could have gone without saying 'because'... because you (well at least I think you were) going for free verse, the because wasn't entirely needed... The two sentences are quite powerful and sympolic, I reckon each on their own would each give contrasting imagery, rather than being joined. Painted the roses red with blood. White never was my color. I don't know... It could however just be me and my weirdness, just my opinion. However nicely done.. and thanks for the review. L.L
Luzith 2006-12-27 ch 1,	this poem is really great. the style is very effective and with the allusions to a.i.w. and i especially like that its not cheesy like a lot of poems can be. nice.

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