An interesting turn of events.
I'm intrigued by the prominent, sudden drop of tension, which I find well-placed, despite its abruptness. Somehow this calm makes for just as much suspense as the last chapter's psycho. Keep it up.

Hmm. It's too early in the morning to be writing. So don't expect it to be long.

With the first sentance: 'Words cannot describe the relief', I thought it might be 'Words could not have described the relief', since everything else is in past tense. Your version works as well, but sounds a little odd.

In chapter three, you mentioned 'torture in the form of Tori’s cooking'. Then you contradicted yourself in chapter five by saying: 'supper ... should have been good'. It is the same meal, right?

I like the way you did the cards. 'all with different volumes of colour and glitter'.

Shina does only want to sleep in Seb's room because she's scared, right?

The card giving out scene was funny. Hmm, I always got the impression Ash was taller than Seb.

And, aw, Erica does like him. Him being Seb, I mean.

hello Charlie! ^^
this chapter raised my heart rate so much :D lol very good story mi dear! your description of his feelings during the game is so accurate!!
and the whole weapons thing added to the tension so much...and when she tipped them onto the table that bit was good
im hooked now from lucy not alex this time :D

hello again this it very well written, i love how you make it so realistic. are the characters based on anyone? lol i think you managed to creep lu out in ch3!! your description of feelings are amazing and it reads really easily!!
the game sounds a little scary! so im off to read about it :)
me n lu are reading it together (so far im the fastter reader mwhahaha) but yeh...we're both addicted :D

HELLO guess who!!
i really like this so far!! i have a friend just like Ash :D...yay fav character so far: Seb n Ash
love from lu n alex x
tallyho...on to the next chapter...

me liketh the title! very very well-written my friend. and you are impossible to criticise (when writing, otherwise i can criticise you a lot) please write more soon!

oh, bad words right at the end! ooh dear, poor seb, having to make valentine's cards for all those girls! and adriel is such a loser, rolling his eyes. but he'll be sorry when he gets to school and a truckload of cards are dumped on him! hahaha!
why does shina really want to sleep in seb's room? does she fancy him or something? strange.
um, you wanted constructive criticism... i think the sentance "Erica and Adriel were the only people that managed to say more than a request to leave, which everyone voiced as quickly as they could" sounds a little strange, but apart from that its fine.

“No, but,” Ash paused, and looked rather sneakily up at Seb, “I’ll settle for a kiss instead.”

aww, good ol' Ash

YOU WROTE MORE!

where was the bad language??

urgh the whole chain of valentine cards thingy reminds me of buying christmas presents/ inviting people to parties "urrgh if i invite them then i have to invite them which means that bla will feel left out" :(

AH EYEBROWS!

xD I wanna valentines card. Seb is FUNY but I'd still rather adriel. Aww, and POOR ASH DIDN'T GET ONE!

The title- how about He'lls School? Sorry, that was corny. Love this.Read and review me please.

It's good how we see (or have an idea) that Adriel knows a lot about Erica. It deepens the mystery about her, and adds a little to his character too.
Layout may not have been a good word to use: "staring at the new layout on the table".

I like how you showed everyone's confusion and fright. But, I get the feeling everyone but Seb has played this before, as he really only seems to be the one not knowing what's going on. And describing everyone holding the items "like china vases" is very good.

I love how Erica is all nice and friendly, and how that's contrasting with everyone else.

It's good how you end the first paragraph thing (before the -). Victim's such a nice word.

Seb thinking to himself is very realistic; at least I think it is. But ... how long has he been at the boarding house for? Surely he would know which room is his, even in the dark.

Not really much to say. The ending few paragraphs were dramatic, full of suspence and realistic. I would be terrified, personally, but I can imagine them all doing what they did.

Ack, you left a lot for the imagination at the end. You didn't make clear (if you wanted to or not) if Erica really was aiming the knife for Seb, or she was just startled as he was. A tad chiche, with the whole 'It was only inches from his head.' part, but oh well.

All in all, good. You're getting much better, I would say, generally. Can't wait for the next chapter (hint hint) and you could try to develop some of the other character's personalities a bit more now you have done the main three.

ah! sounds like the most terrifying game! we are NEVER playing this game, do you hear me?!

its such a good chapter, like the way you capture Seb's fear and stuff was really well written. and i hope that erica hasn't gone crazy and killed everyone. wa, i wanna know what happens next. write more asap, geddit?! whatever, ciao, see you tomorrow.

lol this sounds like a fun game... just without the weapons...

YAY GOTTA LOVE ERICA!

Does she kill him? Is that what the picture with the meat knife is from

That sounds like a FUN game, we should play that!