Very good writing. You capture the mood brilliantly. Thank you for posting this. =]

wow..this is great! i love it!

To answer to your question in the description, a lot is left. There's a nice feeling of numbness from sorrow and pain from the words used in the story.

You could make this into a short movie, it'd be great!

i loved the song.
and this story!
excelently sturing!
dark and aloring
great job.

Nice.
Good work on details.
No obvious spelling or grammar mistakes.
Nice style.

Good work.