I like this and can relate to it. I wrote one that has like the same meaning. Keep on writing and I'd like to read more. Kudos to you. Joey

I looked at some of your stuff, and its not your best, but its also not bad. I do, however, think that everyone needs to do a poem that is similar to this. I know I did. Anyway, its not bad, I just think that the rhyme is kind of forced at the end