You're right, this is interesting. It looks very promising.

You're right.
Interesting.
Don't forget to update. Lol.

Wow, this sounds a LOT like Win a Date with Tad Hamilton! (it's a movie.) Anyways, is Sarella supposed to be a very angry/dark/sarcastic character? If that isn't your intentions, perhaps lighten her up a bit, since throughout the entire chapter, she was yelling and getting mad. Other than that, keep writing-- I see potential!
:) supergal