great closing statements about the bang and song

Very well written. Good job.

Hey, It's Jen. I really like this one. It makes alot of sense considering how distant this world is. Yeah, you're right, if the world can be brought together, then yes, maybe people can gain a better understanding of the universe.

this essay was monotone and uneducated. You provided no evidence to spice it up, except a dictionary definition at the beginning, and you did not separate your thoughts into paragraphs. Furthermore, you never clarified the point of your essay.
Here is a little of my take on music, from my unfinished novel "Gods of Men"
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If there is one thing which the great men of society and the lowliest piece of dirt have in common—if there is one single trait, one strain of enjoyment which is practically the definition of a thinking individual—it is their desire to listen to music. Whether that person be a mindless wretch or the most powerful genius of their age, the human love for music seems to pass all lines of social difference, of intellectual gap, of political philosophy or religious observance. Music to us seems to be as instinctual as eating, and yet, nothing could be farther from instinct as the desire to listen to music. Music bridges that gap between what is thought and what is realized, between what one knows and what one understands. Music is the thing which calms, which clarifies, and which solidifies one’s beliefs. The tyrants use music to calm and deceive the masses, religions use music to bring a touch of the divine to their congregations, militaries use music to rile up their troops. Music provides a rhythm by which our thoughts can tick to. Our blood flows through our veins according to the beat of our heart—but our thoughts flow through our minds by the drum of a melody.

--Atlas Bergeron

I realize you want to open up dialogue, but asking so many questions gets irritating after awhile, especially when you repeat and italicize them to make them seem more important.