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| adnapusa 2007-03-08 ch 1,  | abuseThird paragraph you mention 'back' three times. repetitive words don't sound good, try rewording it? "After all, they have made it almost 15 months together." You can't say 'have' when the entire peice is past tense. Otherwise this is good, very emotional. Good luck with this. |