Oh my God, this is terrible! Why would Jesus allow such a thing to exist!?

Excuse me but I just needed to get that out of my system. To start with, the title of the story made me throw up, though admittedly not on turds. Also, everyone has probably told you this but it's obviously not the worse story ever conceived. Actually it's quite good and could do with an update just for kicks.

Oh, and cat-people are awesome. The only thing better than cat-people are crab-people.

yah. This is really good. It works well, humorous and ironic and has a good tone. and I really like the character's name, it works well. Perhaps the whole thing wouldn't work without that name, it has punctum (R.Barthes punctum...like a small point in a picture/ artistic work with a power that is inexplicable.)i like the short sentence structure and the way everything is to the point. I write in a similar style for some of my works. Many people don't understand this kind of style, but i totally get it. The lack of suspense and description is the key, it is what makes it work, what makes is clever.

actually it's not that bad
it's a lot better than what most people put up
much better grammar than quite a few people on fictionpress

Its funny. Whether you think it stinks like vomit on turds, it's still funny. Now, what would we do if we had no ears?? Why, go crazy of course!! Great story!! "Have you been taking your medication, sweetie?" Lol. :) ='3

1st Review! I'm going to be honest here because you asked for it!

The title made me laugh! It's really interesting, and it's going okay so far. Here's a tip, though. Try naming your main characters with something pernounceable. Something people don't have to glance back and make sure they understood it. Something simple, but nothing Mary-Sue. I realize that Byrony may have came from a seperate universe, but even then there are boundries. You didn't step outside them too far, but I would suggest a different last name?

Anyway, I like your idea. Perhaps a bit more description and suspense. As she woke up, give her a realization and make her into a person, rather than a character. I know you put a little into it, take this part for example...

'She sat up and yawned, stretching. She leapt out of the bed. This wasn't her bedroom!'

It's pretty quick. She sat up, but when did she realize it wasn't her room? Perhaps adding a fragrance she wasn't used to to give a hint of realization for her. The walls are perhaps a different color - just subtle things.

Don't think I'm flamin', because I'm not. This story has great potential! It's going somewhere, and I can't wait to see what happens next!

~Holly