The use of the second person is so powerful.. Especially when read by people who do s-i (like myself) it becomes much more direct and convincing. I also liked the way you spoke from God's viewpoint which makes the reader look from another angle.

Some very good descriptions as well - heavy crimsom tears, dark with pain etc.

A very touching message.

~fleur

It was gorgeous...the flow was great! Thanks for sharing and keep writing!

Wow, this is a very moving piece. The subject is close to my heart and the flow is remarkable. Great work!!
~Beth

beautiful and so sad. I like the first and third stanza. the second bothers a bit. crimson tears is a metaphor just used too often when it comes to poetry about self-mutilation. but the idea is lovely. keep writing, average-psycho

the ending is haunting. beautiful poem. i really only liked the last stanza, the first two don't do the last justice.

A beautiful and incredibly sad piece. I've wondered many times in many different circumstances what I would feel if I could but have a taste of God's heart at that moment. What does He feel in our times of strength or happiness... or weakness... or sorrow.

I thought this was lovely and poingnant, with an excellent choice of words. I think adding punctuation would give it more impact, and the capitals on My break up the flow a bit, but it's still very pretty.