it reads like an argument to me. twisted, disgustingly lovely, and i like it! love can make you crazy.

oh I really like it-- the rhyme in a way detracts at first- but then the more into it you go- the better the rhyming gets, and the stronger the poem is. I love the ending- perfect. favorite line: Our vows just today--

My fingers were crossed."

This would be like a really awesome...back and forth rock song. hahaha. i was singing it in my head--i'm a nerd face...

Yahh i like it!

Oh wow. I don't know what to say. I really like the way the two people talk in this poem, it's interesting. In the beginning, it just seems like two people are simply arguing and then later on, you realize that there's more to it. I really like the story and how you sort of find out what happened to these people. It also makes you wonder what happened to could've caused this.There are a few parts that sound a little bit awkward, like it doesn't flow very well. I tried fiddling with some of the lines in my head but I couldn't figure out how to rearrange the words in a better way. Good job, though, this is overall written very well and I like it. C:

nice rhythm, some forced rhyming but good overall, excuse me for finding it funny, i'm not sure it was supposed to be