Reviews for Undiscovery - FictionPress.com

Reviews For: Undiscovery - Reviews: Page 1 of 3

sam 2008-09-03 ch 7, anon.	abuseBeautiful story. all the best.
Wally G. 2008-07-03 ch 7, anon.	abuseReally? Really? I think I'm going to cry. You have utterly killed my soul. Do you feel like a jerk? Probably not but you should. Any sign of life would be good. I need something. I have absolutely fallen in love with your story and perhaps a little with you from reading your "bio"(although there wasn't really anything about you). Now you have forced me to... I don't even know. I'm at a complete loss for words. Are you out there writing books and getting them published? If you are then tell me! I'll buy them! GOD! I need stories like this. I need your incredible worlds! Just something!
mysticLegend11 2008-03-17 ch 7,	abuseIt is really quite a shame that such a (quite literally) delectable story has been so unthoughtfully betrayed. Pity there aren't more people with a quarter of your brain on FP.
Skylark1 2008-02-25 ch 1,	abuseOh, I loved this. Very professional writing, a distinct English accent, and a plot which is not dull for a moment! I'm eagerly awaiting the next part!
Lorelel 2007-12-26 ch 1,	abuseIt's sad to see that you haven't updated in almost a year...a real pity since Guilliam is really growing on me!
InSilverShadows 2007-12-19 ch 6,	abuseI wish there was a way people as talented as you could make it to be bestsellers. All the New York Times cares about is how young you are to be a literary genius and how much Tolkien you've absorbed.
InSilverShadows 2007-12-19 ch 4,	abuseYour writing is almost reminescent of Terry Pratchett's fantasy satires, or even (a little more subtly) of Voltaire. Yeah, he's a little older, sure, but Voltaire can hold his own in the world of modern literature, just as you can.
InSilverShadows 2007-12-18 ch 2,	abuseOhmygosh. I love Guilliam. I'll be honest, the only reason I started reading this was because the summary said the main character was fat, which sounded ridiculously refreshing. I expected to hate him, but Lord he's hilarious. I swear.
InSilverShadows 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuseI am in love with it already. It's stories like this that make me glad I've tried to develop my own writing. :P I keep my old middle-school stuff on here for laughs and to look at sometimes. This is genius. I really love it. :)
caeller.door 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseI liked your hoempage disclaimer thing. I can't wait to read the rest of your story... I'm completely tired of the over-used stereotypes seen in most fantasy writings.
Clare 2007-07-10 ch 7, anon.	abuseHey, I'm really impressed so far. It's well-constructed and well- paced and, most importantly, it's original which is a huge change for online and published fantasy work. I'm looking forward to continuing it. I have one small thing to say which may be wrong: Your fat-boy companion for Guilliam on the boat, Lumpwick, speaks with an accent that immediately evokes a relatively poor social strata. I could be overthinking this but it seems odd that anyone with that accent would be so well-fed.
mushroom 2007-06-02 ch 3, anon.	abuse"His bosoms leapt haphazardly in all directions," Best phrase ever, I swear. Great job, and please continue.
Phantos 2007-05-10 ch 7,	abuseThis story makes me think of Candide... I think it must be the subtle wit of your writing style, because there's nothing about it that should make me think of Candide... but I do. Guilliam also reminds me of Dudley, but that's another story entirely. On another note: This story is a breath of fresh air and a bucket of cold water: Fresh air because the main character is so horrendous, and cold water because it makes me realize how terribly traditional my stories are. Elves and names with apostrophes and all that. My only criticism is that the last section of chapter seven seems incongruous with the rest of the story. It was a bit difficult to read. The move from humorous to serious is too much for this poor reader's mind.
Frosthold 2007-05-09 ch 1,	abuseVery good! So many of your phrases were absoulutely spectactular, even when Guilliam wasn't (in a good way)! I'll read the next chapter when I get the chance. -Frost
Westley Taninger 2007-05-06 ch 7,	abuseWell, I just checked my old E-mail for the first time in... ages. And this was waiting for me. This is a very interesting work to read, even if just for the ideas involved. I'm really looking forward to seeing you continue this... and fervently hope that you do. Even if not here, then certainly to get it published. I know I'd buy it, once it's been finished and edited and all. The only things I'd even dream of complaining about are chapter length and this dry spell of updates, but... really, both are fine. Long chapters aren't necessarily better, and as long as you do go through with writing, it's okay with me if I don't get to see it all right now. Anyhow, I'm afraid I need to be going. To sum up: Good job.

Return to Top