   SeraphiumRose 2007-02-07 . chapter 9Well, I would definitely have to go with your friend and cast my vote with Ashford. I mean he seems to be the type that is different from their first portayal. Although at times he may come off as a jerk, to me he comes off as a real sweethearet who at the moment is suffering from a crush. Hence his actions concerning the crashing into the pole and the vomit incidents. In his case his actions seem to speak louder than his words. Another reason he gets my vote is due to the fact that he recognizes a conniving ** when he sees one (Lillie *coughs*. Most guys might have fallen in to her web of slutdom by now but Ashford did not and he sees her for what she truly is. Now on the other hand I dislike that Jake character. To me he seems fishy and that is without reading this chapter. I mean first of all he has not known Leslie that long and he just kisses her out of the blue. Come on they were friends! he has now ruined a good relationship, somehow he does not seem to me to be the type to go back to friendly status with his ex's. I don't know maybe I am just being a little paranoid. Anyway back to the kiss, from his actions I have contrived that he acts like the type of person who is in it for the action. For example his kissing her without permission or warning makes him look, in my opinion, like a person without good intentions. But all of this is just my opinion and although I may want Jake to fall off the face of the earth, I am not the author of this story. Now that I have finished my ranting, I would just like to say that you are doing a wonderful job with this story. It is entertaining and beyond a few spelling errors here and there, which ohter have pointed out, it seems to be pretty well-written. Keep it up! I look forwad to reading more. :) |
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