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| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseMesmerizing, as of all your other poems as well. I enjoy every single one. You have an amazing vision. ^^ Keep it up |
| beti213 2007-07-19 ch 1, | abuseI have a friend(?) like this. good use of vocabulary, (indolent! almost like there are smart poets on this site!) sugary-sweetness, and color. |
| recycle rhymes 2007-04-15 ch 1, | abuseaww sweet love the whole candy cane thing...cute :) |
| burning in effigy 2007-04-09 ch 1, | abuseso many little lines in this that are just perfect cute but sad and reminiscent last line made me smile :) fantastic job! |
| coldsunlight 2007-02-26 ch 1, | abusethere is always going to be someone to miss. you express it well. the last line, it just makes it wonderful. |
| simpleplan13 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseI love the half empty half full line... the whole poem is great... it has an awesome poem... not really sad, just wistful maybe... i dunno its wonderfully done |
| like a lover 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abusedirty with my colors. i loved that. |
| AboveTheSalt 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuselove the metaphor throughout. not cliche but familiar. i interpeted the third line as when the speaker drinks, it fills the other person's eyes up with the murky water in correlation. interesting. beautiful lament. |
| cocaine and cherries 2007-01-27 ch 1, | abusegah. you always leave me speechless. |
| st. maverick 2007-01-08 ch 1, | abuseI love this. the almostpain/missing someone is there so wanton and abrupt; it's impossible to miss. |
| Aquafied 2007-01-06 ch 1, | abusecheers to the newyear my heart stops wheni see you have posted something |
| poetic abortion 2007-01-04 ch 1, | abuseOh. I always loved the name Jude--probably because it reminded me of Judas, much like how Evelyn reminds me of Eve--and the last line was so reminiscent to The Beatles--damnit, I used caps :/--and, oh; you want me to fangirl you like nuts and more so because you already KNOW that I love you(r work). No. Seriously; every line tastes sweet like candy and has this added kick of something more. Hmn--what would you call it? Seduction, probably, but I'm thinking something along the lines of "romantic and addictive like, um, love and a lot like heartbreak just waiting to happan and i'loveyoualways,justdon'thate(forget)me." No, seriously. It just DOES. Oh. And I totally read WAY too deeply into this and it might just be the sugar, the cough medicine, my ever-presant fear of the world UTTER DOOM and stuff that will bore you and, yeah--people can now definitly tell that I am tired. [like when we were kids, sucking on candy canes in July, and sticking to each other, smile to smile; heart(break) to heart(break)- "Hey, Jude, where did you go?"] -- Oh. I think I love you lots. No, that line completely HAS me and just hook.line.sinker. Oh. Ohohoohohohohohoh. Love it. LOVE it. I want to read all your poems again and again until I just stop writing, because somebody already is doing it beyond perfectly. - Noelle |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-01-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is such a lovely little piece. The beginning of it reminds me of a poem I wrote called "paint" (original title, I know). But enough about me. I love the "sucking on candy canes in July" part. I can imagine that so clearly. Wonderful. Keep writing! :) |
| dollface and her cancer 2007-01-01 ch 1, | abuseoh, isn't it, though. i adore this. as soon as i read the first line, i thought, "yes. i will say i love this line." but then i read the second, and felt unfaithful; the third, and knew i was lost. this is satin and perfect. |