 Black and White Dreams 2007-02-12 . chapter 1Aww... ='( That's so sad...
I just thing you're a bit to repetitive with the line "Since you're gone". Also, in the sixth line, you say: "I wondering when you'll come back." That should be "I'm wondering when you'll come back" or "I wonder when you'll come back."
Good job though. Sweet, but sad.
~Black and White Dreams~ |