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Luna Turner 2007-07-26 ch 1,	abuseWonderful, and sad. I love how you express yourself and life events through writing. It's amazing. ~midnightjoy
Icicle Tears 2007-03-01 ch 1,	abusecries You seem so sad, (yet utterly content, ironically), in this poem. I'm guessing almost everything is a reference to your mother, besides the dragonfly... I don't know what that would reference to. This seems to explain, to me, myself, what's been going on in my own life. It's like a conduit to speaking, within these words. Can words unlock the vocal cords? It seems so. sexes you Only a few more to go! Heh, then I'll have -owned- you. But, seriously, I'm getting there. Thank you...for writing. It brightens my day.
Rosemarine 2007-01-25 ch 1,	abuseSomehow this poem draws out your memories and old wounds in such a real way it's frightening. It is so close, i can touch it. I can smell the swamp and feel the cold goodnight kiss. My family has also endured much, and I have been unfairly been deprived of brother and father, and after so many wounds , you begin to wonder, can it ever be made to heal? But yeah, excellent poem.
S. Ben Beach 2007-01-18 ch 1,	abuseWow. Wow is all I can say. That is seriously brilliant! Awesome metaphors, and every imagery fits so well with each other! is jealous xDD keep doing your thing yo!
Xerophyte 2007-01-17 ch 1,	abuseWow. The last line (and the repetition of those words) is powerful. I love your poems, especially how they tie into and sometimes personify nature. I hope you're ok -hugs-. Home does not have to be a place, but it can be a feeling in a person. I hope you find your way home. (Does that seem a little loopy to you?) Anyway, like always, an excellent poem. -Xerophyte
no.peace.los.angeles 2007-01-12 ch 1,	abuseWow, this piece is insanely long, but it works. Usually I lose interest in really long pieces, but I didn't with this one. I don't know if it was the subject matter or what, but I kept my interest. So good job with that. How you connected the beginning and the end, and made a metaphor out of the swamp - that was fantastic. The last two lines are haunting. Great work. Keep writing! :)
Fact or Fiction 2007-01-08 ch 1,	abuseOh God, beautiful. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. It's all I can say. There were times when it almost treaded into suburban emo land, but then you'd add another word and it'd be straight back on the road of artsy intelligence. Just gorgeous, your poems have a kind of un-touchable feel to them. I just want to go up and hug it - odd reaction, I know - but then something stops me and I can only look from afar. I can't even pick a favourite line for this because they were all so damn good. The closest I have would be this line, "Nip you like the horsefly who hunts the innocent" But I don't even know why I like it so much. Now normally I'd offer some sympathy for what appears to be a bad relationship between mother and daughter, but after some nasty trial and errors, I remembered that writers tend to exaggerate. And your poetry almost seems like a ridiculously exaggerated metaphor, or thought, but it's just so beautiful it doesn't matter. Ugh, I am forever jealous of your ability to seemingly come up with this so easily. Do you just write this on spot, or do you take your sweet time? Anyways, sorry if this doesn't make much sense, but I'm sick and nothing makes sense to me right now, haha. Happy writing, Fact or Fiction
Samana 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abusethis is really good. i love the emotion in it. so raw and real. hope everything works out for you, sincerly Dustin
meaninglessTears 2007-01-05 ch 1,	abuseah i like the wording of it and... ah it's just a good poem. keep writing!
Moondog Dozier 2007-01-05 ch 1,	abuseThe voice and the continuation of voice in this is marvelous. Your well developed descriptions really give a vivid haunting picture portrait of the situation. This is extraordinarily well written. A joy to read, as the emotion oozes from this, making it truly relatable. Excellent work.
Lynaeve 2007-01-05 ch 1,	abuseBeautifully done. The use of the swamp and the images it conveys were wonderful. The lines "Like the petals of a dying lily. And my heart wilts like the stem. Wilting stems congregate, Gather, Droop in the mud-water Of the swamp made of dirt and sweat" were some of my favorites in this poem. Great job.
Karine Dragon'sheart 2006-12-31 ch 1,	abuseHaunting...this reminds me so much of what I myself have been going through, my own heart led awry by one whom I once trusted with my life...masks, like bodies, crumble so easily. Beautifully done, and thank you for the review. I haven't been getting alerts lately, so I've had to keep checking...and I was pleasantly surprised! Thank you again! Laters, KD
LoopyGirdlejuice 2006-12-31 ch 1,	abuseI cannot even explain how much I can relate to this. The part that I could relate to the most was "Guilty: An unfair state (In my case) Into which I was half-wrongly shoved." Well done.

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