this story amazes me. great writing.

27 lines above "Walk for two more day" needs an s.

There is a "..remember" that needs ed but I can't find it now.


Ouch! How depressing! I loved it! Could use a few commas in some places but wow, good!

Fantastic ending. You're amazing at imagery, you know? The mental scenes you paint are so vivid. So realistic too. Another great work!

Very sad, but realistic...

I really like the story, you could have put a bit more horror in it though, kudos for the ending.

Really good, i liked the ending.

It sounds, actually, really interesting. Keep it up.