Oh gods and **--

There's another ending to your story, you know. One, and she breaks herself when she leaves him. Little pieces of her drop to the floor, are swept under the rug. She loved him more than life itself and when her palace of toothpicks blew down, she had nothing--and nothing to do but remake herself again.

Months, near year later, and everything is the same, different-same, but same. She still worries about school, annoying habit of falling in love with things she can't have (like ideas and cities.)

No regrets, though. Stranger than anything, she thinks, but no regrets because she has another chance at a life outside of his arms. No regrets, and she wonders if that's horrible of her. No regrets, and--

she presses her eyes shut, sometimes, at a memory. No tears, but her face spasms and her hands curl in on themselves. Continues typing.

But...

It was worth it. You know?

-Katie

Aw, that was awfully melancholic - I almost cried there, at the end. (That might, of course, be hormones, but this thing didn't help. :P) As usual, you're absoloutely brilliant at writing, and I couldn't love you more for it. It's really damn hard, finding good fiction online, but your fics are always Heck Yeah-fics. I mean, you write better than some of the published authors out there. This one was great - melancholic, like I said, and the kind that makes you stare puppy eyed at the screen afterwards, wondering why the world is so cruel. Which is brilliant. Yesh. :)

that was a rather impressive short. Cameron's character reminded me of myself, and the main character of a few girls I've known. I think the story deals well with change in a relationship. My final interpretation is that the main character wanted to move on past Cameron, but wouldn't admit it to herself.

m. very pretty. i like the way everything's not a fairytale ending, but also the way that everything isn't horribly tragic. it's a nice, realistic mix of good and bad. i also like a lot of your details- little things like, the girl's nose tingling when she's about to cry. it's things like that that help a person really understand and identify with what you wrote. anyway, very nice work.