Reviews for The Invasion of Refuge

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amandaj2351 2008-08-13 ch 2,	abuseI'm thoroughly confused about where Allie's going. I know she's going to her father's but what about Lana? When is she coming? I really like Stephen, he's sweet--what does he look like?--and I like Danny. He's so overprotective; it reminds me of my brothers.
amandaj2351 2008-08-13 ch 1,	abuseNice start! I love Allie already. She's such a homemaker. I've never met a girl so young who liked baking so much! Reading on...! Are you ever going to resume this story? (I sent the next chapter of One of the Boys in DocX)
Briar Rose 05 2007-08-15 ch 26,	abuseI know what you mean. I'm a senior this year and I'm signed up for 3 AP classes, 3 sceince classes (one is AP) and then I have like 2 easy classes so I don't get too over worked (one is a easy science one). High school is insane!
Briar Rose 05 2007-07-31 ch 25,	abuseOMG! a whole MONTH! I don't think i can go that long! lol. I love this story. it's really good! keep it up!
RoseLife 2007-07-18 ch 25,	abuseYour story is so cute! Hope ya have a great time on camp!! Update as son as you can! :) RL
hija de jesucristo 2007-07-12 ch 10,	abusemeh. they danced. that's it? okay. more fluffiness in next chapter? soon?
kstar129 2007-07-09 ch 24,	abuseAwesome!Make more SOON!
Breezy 2007-07-09 ch 5, anon.	abusewhat u do is put a hammer in a purse and be a pack rat and fill it with tons of crud. Purses weren't made for carrying crud!Haha! Anyway swing the purse and you've got urslef a knocked out dude! Easy as pie! Don't ask how I know this! HEHE!
amber-skies 2007-06-19 ch 21,	abuseThis is really, really good, one thing though, about Patty, i can't really figure her out; one moment she's really bitchy and the next she's all eager to take Allie out shopping...apart from though, brilliant
planet mars 2007-06-12 ch 15,	abusehey, i´ve been reading your story and so far so good. i havent seen a lot of romance, and its spaced out. but hey, a slow paced story is good every now and then. well, there are two exceptions to the overall goodness of your story, which might seem to be a little bitchy but heh, i get bitchy bout them. first one is spanish, i am assuming you are not a native speaker. which is not a bad thing, dont get me wrong, but a lot of the translations are messed up and if half your spanish speaking student population is Spanish, you must know Spanish spanish is different from most of American spanish. Just like British english and American english, however, there are more differences between spanish"es" than between english"es" (wow thats weird) for example, instead of usted as is used in america (usted as a matter of fact, is a deformation form vuestra merced, that the little indigenous people in america had to call their "owners"), in spain vos is used, you know, the most faithful spanish in america is argentinian in that sense which steve should use, seeing as he was raised there until 6... or 10... or whatever, however, those are the years were language learning and understanding plays a bigger role (and really, antony steven arroyo, not meaning to be mean but most of the world does not want to name their kids in english, unless of course they are ignorant fools that quite literally name their kids from whatver they see on tv. ive actually seen people that are either named (as a fisrt name only, mind you) jennifer lopez or leonardo dicaprio, and of course usmail (not as in us mail, but i think chicano confused it with ismaiel and thought that usmail was a name) is a basic one. of course there are people named aniv. de la rev. which stands as an abbreviation for aniversario de la revolucion and some people when they see a calender they just name their kids from whichever saint is celebrated that day, a common catholic practice, so why not name them aniv. de la rev. seeing he moved to america, his parents shouldnt have had any gringo influence, but hey, can happen). anyway, the other exception is a little bit more petty... OV7? dude, thats not nice... at all. there are tons of spanish bands that rule over OV, lousy teeny boppers that they were, heck kalimba alone is better and its still not nice. i mean there is mago de oz (with the plus that they are spanish, so obviously spaniards should know them, practically unknown in the english speaking world, but in the spanish speaking one, they are recognized as the best metal band by everyone, preps, punks, darketos and heck, even my parents) if you favor the metal crowd, cafe tacuba if you want something more folkish, colectivo nortec is great synth music. there are billions of cool ska bands (seeing as there are in california, ska is a little appropiate), placido domingo and andrea bocelli if you are more classical minded, mecano for popish. well, at least you didnt choose RBD or something as lousy as that. anyway there a lot of songs that have more meaning than an sclub7 spanish version´s songs (they even had a tv show, too). i just read your profile, i promise to write my review properly next time i do so ;). you´ll have excuse if this one lacks a proper form im too lazy to correct it. btw, this is in no way a flame or anything of the like, just a way to address my pet peeves (i can totally understand the comma before the and) i have many, but i think the spanish usage in other people´s stories is my biggest one. so if you need help, ill be more than to help you. anyway, hope you finish soon. luv, planet mars
MissBamBam 2007-06-08 ch 21,	abuseargh NO! they're just FRIENDS.sheesh i bet it was lana. or maybe hannah :S either way this was a good chapter :) update faster? pretty please?!! i really want to know who saw them LOL but goodluck!!
RoseLife 2007-06-05 ch 21,	abusei think its...LANA!?!?!? lol not sure but she was the first person that popped into my head hehee lol =] i love your story!! keep up the great work!! and dont forget to update!! lol ~TLB~
Simfreak111 2007-05-07 ch 4,	abuseso far i kind of like the story but as i said before it is growing on me. if this makes any sense at all i hate this story but i like it in so many ways, because you have a very wide vocabulary and good details. hopefully it will get better as i read on. i know what i don't like about it: patty; she has evil step mother written all over her, and i don't like the way she treats the "maids." allie seems out of her bubble. oh and where are their aunt and uncle in all of this?
Simfreak111 2007-05-07 ch 3,	abusegood first 3 chapters. i don't have enough time to keep reading but hopefully i will finish it tomorrow. this story is beginning to grow on me...i didn't really like the beginning, but that doesn't take away the fact that you are a wonderful writer! keep up the good work, hopefully i will read the remaining chapters tomorrow.
Drama-Geek-1662 2007-04-25 ch 17,	abuseloved the chapter I love how you add little things into you're story to make it seem real and it's really funny, and I think the whole dress thing in the begining was cute.

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