Haha! I know this is pretty unrelated to the poem, but your author's note really made me giggle. It really reminds me of my best friend and I.

I love the rhythm in this. The syllable counts are very similar and, though it's short, it had a good pulse.

The rhyme is also good. It isn't forced and it helps with the drive of the poem.

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Ah! Nice. It's a bit simplistic, but if you made it elaborate is would not be as good. Because the tone matches the emotion of such a person in which they can't fully express their feelings. I really like this poem.

Thanks for the review! I actually do not remember the last two lines and when I went back and read it I noticed they did not fit. I have to walk away from my work to see if from far back otherwise I miss everything. Thank you.

well done, i like it. keep writing.

very nice

Short and sweet with bitterness too.

Good job.

SirScott