Love it. :)

It reminds me almost of Mercedes Lackey's Valdemar/Velgarth series...

update, please? ;D you know you want to!! i love this story!

Very nice! I like it, you should definitely update soon, okay? Keep up the good work!

Ash

holy crap, you updated.
and hey, cheese is awesome. it wouldn't be cheese if it didn't work

WAH!

omg -dies-

you updated!! If this is cheese, then give me more! 8D
I luv you yeito-chan *tosses in a bout of fever* I'm sorry I haven't talked to you more, but..but...I wuv you. ;.;
Awesome chapter. I'm so proud.

So I read your story, and decided I really really liked it. I'm confused as to why you only have eight reviews so far. I'm going to recommend it to a friend of mine, she'll probably like it also. I haven't got any stories posted, if you happen to check just in case you were wondering what kind of person was reviewing your story, mostly because I'm a beta (also because I'm really self-concious about my stories) for this friend of mine who I'm going to recommend this for. I believe your piece has a very nice storyline so far, even though its pretty short. The antagonist seems quite evil. Chapter 2 makes me think you've got quite a lot planned out, as you mentioned at the beginning. I just looked at the updated date; its been over a year! I think you should really come back to this. Is it possible? If you want some help or anything I'd be glad to offer my services, though they aren't much. I read Skin Deep also, though I didn't review it (sorry, I was a little busy at the time) I'll probably get around to it some time. I hope this encourages you to write... blah I'm not giving you any critcism. I'm quite sorry about that. So, back to criticism. I love how you have so many details about things, it makes the story very full, sort of like soup or chowder. Your details are the ingrediants that add to the flavor and without them, it would be a rather strained and watery soup. But you don't have a lot of soup to put the ingrediants into yet! You need to put more liquid into this bowl that you've made, get my drift? I've put this story on alert and I promise to review it again as soon as you update. Senti seems like such a nice character. I get the feeling that a lot of bad things are going to happen to him, similar to your story Skin Deep. A good person that gets put into a wonderful yet terrible situation and has a lot of bad things occur. Its so sad, but it sings to the soul. Haha, sings? Singer? Amazingly well-done. I await your next installment.

can't wait for this one to finaly update either...

Yeito-chan, I always love the attention you give to detail. It makes a world so much more believable and one can actually see it in your mind.

The Last Singer is no acception. From merely reading chapter one, you identify with Senti and see through his eyes. The way the children talk and act around him reminds me of how if society would only give an open mind about what they don't understand and not be so judgemental, they could actually start to see this seemingly heartless killer for who he really is. Anyone who get's to know the truth behind why he's forced to do those horrifying things seems to get killed though. Bummer.

But you see that not everything about Senti is about destruction. He tries to immagine what life outside of the battlefield and blood streaked skies is like. He also is kind to people whenever he can be, even if they don't understand or appreciate it. It seems the only person that stands in his way is Tormen. If only he was targeted for assassination instead of Senti...but I guess that would make it too easy. ^_^

And so with that, on to chapter 2! XD

Hi,

First of all, I like your writing a lot, so please don't be offended by my critique. I always feel like I sound too harsh in writing.

You don't need to write everything out. If there is, like, a ceremony going on, and nothing really interesting happens, just say the ceremony happened. Give a few details, make it real, but reading the whole thing is just boring.

I like the story, but I feel a little detached from it, like this is happening on the other side of a crosshatched screen. Make me feel like I'm part of this world.

That's all I can think of now. :)

Oh, darn it, I was hoping i was first again! LOL. Anyway, terrific job, as usual I love Senti, he's so sweet...you just have to feel horrible for him, don't you? Obviously...:D And Maqtriv is so nice, and caring, to run after him like that. You feel bad for both of them! ANyway, can't wait to read more, terrific job!

This story is actually really quite interesting.
It's different and the characters can easily catch your attention.
Fanatasy stories usually aren't my forte, and I'm not that fond of reading them. But this one is interesting and I would love to see how far your plot,characters and writting go.
If I had to give something to complain about I suppose it would be the angst but it's well placed.

Please write more :P

poor singer. that king dude seriously needs to be shot, or maybe something a little more grusome...

Poor Senti, Please update soon.

I feel so bad for Senti. That's absolutely horrible, to be able to kill people like that...to be forced to kill people in such a way. And I can't wait to see what else happens! It sounds so good, and you did wonderfully so far!
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