I actually think the lyrics fit with the poem. I like it very much. It's sad and seems as if it could be every clown's story. I really like it. All in all it's great. Nice job.

Ah! This borders on bizarre and slightly creepy, methinks. However, I'm iffy on the Green Day lyrics. I know that part of your charm is using lyrics in your poems and stories, but honestly, it took away from the mood for me. It's a good line, but the tune of the dong doesn't match up with the rest of the poem.