Hi sis! This is Mew!

Okay...I regret one thing after reading this story...I regret why didn't I read it earlier! I love this, just like how I love Caelestis. Your style of writing fantasies are amazing sis, and I really love how you create each and every character. By the way I envy DawnEve...I also want a room filled with soft and comfy furnitures made of cloud! I can imagine how
great it feels to sit on them!

From chappie 4 it begins to make me feel curious...who's the next heir? And oh, DawnEve is quite selfish but women are likely to be quite selfish lol. Well I hope you can update soon...so I'm not left in curiosity!

Please update soon sis! Can't wait to read the next chappies!

-Mew

Have you ever read Piers Anthony's Incarnation of Immortality series? It goes on a similar plot of various forces of nature (Death, Fate, Time, War, Nature, Good, and Evil) as offices and someone has to fill the office. This reminds me someone of the book about in the incarnation of Good ("And Eternity"), where the incarnation of Good is replaced to avoid an event that would end in the devil winning. I don't know exactly how similar it will be, but your story reminds me of that series of books for some reason. If you haven't read them, give them a try.

This chapter doesn't really explain anything, which isn't necessarily a bad thing. You just need to be clear that when you say "Heaven" you are or you are not referring to the Christian Heaven. Also, make sure that you have the laws of your world down. If there is a religion revolving around DawnEve make sure it is plausible, not just worshipping her because she is the supreme diety in whatever pantheon or monotheon you choose to create.

Shadowhound