Wow, that is an intense piece. I love the phrase "saltine bones of the old." That's so fresh and crisp, and the sound of the o in bones and old is just nice. Oh, this whole poem is just fantastic. Fabulous job. Keep writing! :)

Very interesting connections. I like "the saltine bones of the old", very specific and telling. This has kind of a warped feeling to it, like it is sliding down the page as a progression. Kind of like individual bursts of knowledge that combine to a larger meaning. Well done. MD:77.

The topic of this poem is quite enigmatic, yet its tone is extremely well done. It's mystifying and haunting, but at the same time presents a strange security. Excellent, although the last two lines don't seem to offer the enigmatic feeling as the beginning. That is a difficult position, though, being as the poem itself is so short. It is its strength, though. On the whole, excellent job.

Somewhat shorter than your usual, but no less beautiful. It has a very spiritual side to it, very graceful. Quite wonderful, indeed.

Not bad. Only wondering why the first line is italicized. I don't think it needs to be at all.

However, you paint a nice little picture with few words. Impressive.

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