Despite it's seemingly cliche elements, this poem really resonates. The rhythm is so good, I almost feel like it should be a song. I like the break between "faded... stars." and "Sorry Philadelphia." The idea of instability in the house comes across, the last line is kind of overkill. But overall, phenomenal poem.

The first two lines create a beautiful setting for the rest of the poem and you really build on the original imagery. I like how you address Philadelphia, and there is an abstract quality about your poetry. In saying 'dead like stars' you really go the opposite way from the norm, and I like how you use stars in a different context. The final line just sums it up perfectly. Beautiful poem. My favourite of yours so far.

Interesting idea, I must say. It wasn't what I expected, and I like that. Way to write the unexpected,
-Ellie

best thing i've read tonight! it's a fantastic metaphor weaved around vivid imagery and delicate rhyme. the opening lines envoke so much. well done.