Hey there, this is Outlaw-2,

Well, the summary was quite a read. Been a while since I last noticed an active story based on racing other than mine. Now then, onto the review. Unfortunately, there are quite a number of flaws here and there, tons. Oh no. Here goes.

Fortunately the short prologue explained very much what had happened in the past of Karin, but that's not the main point. First,

1: You could visualise and describe Karin and the other's appearances before any form of conversation.

or

2: You could surprise the reader with an anonymous speech or sentence before describing the character's appearance. It can be very much helpful to the readers who may have an imaginative mind. (I'm one of them, :P)

Secondly, if you want to emphasis on the characters yelling, USING CAPS ISN'T GOING TO HELP. Instead, you can make use of the italics as an emphasis, or simply end the sentence with an exclamation mark '!'. Slang in a speech sentence is all right as it brings out the behaviour of the character.

Third, you might want to cut down slightly on the speech in a chapter, add a bit more action here and there, or a small thriller for example, a colleague of hers appearing out of nowhere like a cartoon character (This may bring out a bit of humour).

Other than that, I am a bit skeptical about the Lotus Elise, but since its the first car in the story, I may let it slide should the story progress wonderfully. Should you have doubts, drop by a PM in my profile. :D

Sincerely,

Outlaw-2, The one in the Tommykaira R, the one in the Toyota Chaser.

Nice job, you left me wondering about Karin and Mikes past, keep up the good work