I have a suggestion for you. When Rayne leaves and Michael calls after him, instead of "yelled/whispered", how about changing it to something like "whispered forcefully"? Two opposites bound by a slash seems a little awkward, in my opinion. Anyways, it's just a suggestion! Other than that, I am enjoying where this is going. Whe! Keep up the great work! I hope you keep going with this story!

Oh, battle. I really like where this is going and I really love the idea of it all. I especially love the name Rayne since it sounds exactly like rain. I made up a character named Rayne once for that reason. Never did anything with him, though. I get random inspirations and then they just fade out on me. So! There isn't much for me to say but the usual: keep up the good work!

Hey! It's Nariko from Apparently "Nariko" was taken already so I just put in the rest of my name (as seen in my email). I've had it for a long, long time. Anywho! I got all your replies to my reviews for your fanfics and I would love to help you out with this! You know, stupid me, I never realized you had gone through stuff like that until I really read your profile, and I guess I should have expected it considering how realistic your cutting scenes are. I'm glad you smile more now. :) But yeah... I like this so far. And of course I will read more. And let's see...what other comments did I want to address from your review replies...? Ah yes! I'm very glad I've been able to be of at least some help to you in terms of writing, and it makes me very happy to hear someone say that. So of course I will continue to support you! Keep up the good work!