Lol interesting one. I like it alot.

Wow, I love this. The way you use names makes this experience seem real, which is cool because the person narrating the poem totally isn't the type who you'd think would write poetry. How you tweak the words a little gives it that sort of rough, abrasive edge, which fits the character so well... it in itself is like a kid cutting corners, rushed and brash. You've got the whole tone down pat. Whoo!

haha, little punkers
it has that special tink to it


actually, i find it very amusing

oh dude, i love it. it's so frenetic, you know that wound up feeling when... well.. you end up punching people :P. insincere lips was very nice indeed.

I make the same mistakes over and over again, too. It's... kind of sad. xP