This is good but should be placed in the fiction section rather than here in poetry. I say this because of your formating - how the words look on the page (or screen). Genre-wise this is very much like a subconscious stream of thought, not quite like but in the same style as Virginia Woolfe or James Joyce. If you do want to make this a poem I would encourage you to break this down into stanzas with calculated line breaks without elipses (those ... things - technically you should only use three).