honestly i dont know how much i can help here cause i dont often "review" poetry. i'm no good at poetry myself but i do like to read it once in a while. what i like from poetry is when i can understand the message and the deeper meanings of a poem that is written. obviously you wrote this poem to display that youve had some complications in your life concerning love. dont feel sad or ashamed to be in love with another. if you truly love someone and they love you in return then it is meant to be. remember, even if there is lust now and again, relationships and love in particular go far deeper than simple lust. // I actually liked the poem it has a powerful message. the repitition of phrases was used well though it got confusing a little bit the more often they were repeated but i think its fine to keep them in// i know i didnt comment much on the poem itself but i hope that you are able to find what you are looking for in your love life
sincerely always,
--Hite

Once again, you show that you have a literary talent for writing poetry. You have a gift with poetry...especially the type that has a dark edge to it. :)

The only suggestion I would give you was that it was a little long and repetitious; a lot of the times the same 'refrain' would appear two or three times. Making it a little shorter might heighten its emotions by making it concise and focused.

I really like this. "Gossamer wings"...that's such a pretty phrase. It's quite a dark poem, but that's what gives it such a wicked appeal. I hope you decide to write more.

I like it, very dark and mysterious and I had flashes of images...Kinda curious as to who you wrote it for. :P I probably don't know them anyway.

I really need inspiration ust to write a poem for English class. xD ...**.

WOW! Lyssa, that was awesome, great come back, it's so real and so powerful, love the word choices they make the craving and the longing for the end very obvious. You need to write more. Love it! -Justyn-