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| Showstopper 2007-03-07 ch 3,  | abuseRead this and I liked it. Looks like you've got some bad blood going with the Jewels against the Pigs. I liked the change you made with the Pigs in general. I do think that when you have the rematch, that the Pigs actually hang with them a bit more without help from biased refs. Interesting backstory with Lia by the way. Keep up the good work and have a good day, :) |
| Showstopper 2007-01-21 ch 2, | abuseHey man. I read this chapter and I liked it. Don Lemon and Peia had a nice chemistry between each other as they went on in the match. I personally think the commentators have to be on point because they set the tone for the broadcast and the reader. I was worried the Jewels wouldn't pull it out but they did. I like Lia by the way. Interested in the next chapter. Have a good day, :) |