You created a very strong imagery in my mind from that poem. Good job. Please read and review my stuff.

Very deep. I love poems that sort ask questions, it really leaves me thinking after I've read it. Oh yeah and Iron Maiden rocks!
Keep Writing.
~**~Indiana~**~

Beautiful. This Is just, beautiful.

AHh...the crush, the forbidden love, the enigma... call it what you want, but no matter what the name, it still carries the same feeling of desperate longing; your five senses filled to the brim and overrunning with that person’s essence. I know this piece has already been quoted as being 'beautiful', but I feel it needs to be said again. Beautiful. I read it through several times. Each time as I reached the end, I felt compelled to read it again...to feel it again... to dance again. Nice job!

I don't know how to comment on this really, the only word that comes to mind is 'beautiful'.

W-O-W. I loved this. it is truly amazing " I see you, but you see only what I show you. Look beyond me. See what I feel." I love that part. it is very well written. The whole time I could imagine what was happening. I also love the part " I pretend I can feel our breath on my face, your body supporting mine." this is excelent. keep writing