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lonely silhouette 2008-05-19 ch 1,	I liked it, but the continuos rhyming almost made it childish. In certain sections of the poem it was fine, but I think you could get your point across more clearly without some of the rhymes such as "must" and "bust". But, I like this and your message was true. Liars are SO annoying. --A Raindrop's Shadow
My World Of Fragile Things 2008-04-14 ch 1,	nice, sad, and too the point. i like your writing its unique in a way i havent seen.
xxInsanityxx 2008-03-12 ch 1,	i love this, i hate liars so much they are so annoying, its so awesome it flows very well, keep up the good work :) ~xxInsanityxx
quarantinedheart 2008-03-05 ch 1,	Wow, I think that's really good. I was reading your review for my brother's poem, and I think you're a pretty chill writer. Honestly, even though this one you published about a year ago, it's amazing. All of what I've read so far of yours shows really good talent. I've always hated liars and that's why I think I can really relate to this one the most. Anyways, I hope you continue writing, because I believe you've really got something going here for yourself.
lovelesspoet93 2008-02-23 ch 1,	wow this is really good and really true i know what that feels like great job and well written
97thparis 2008-02-21 ch 1,	Definitley how i fell sometimes :)
Take the Money and Run 2008-02-21 ch 1,	It's very short but strong. Very true, and relateable. Great job i loved it.
Vampire Kitsune 2008-02-21 ch 1,	Ooh, nice poem! :D no, you aren't rusty, it's good!
softer side of apples 2008-02-21 ch 1,	AMEN!! I HATE A LIAR.. GREAT PIECE AND RIGHT ON POINT.
Twilight Starr 2007-10-11 ch 1,	Liars can very annoying and a bad influence. Good job. ~Twilight Starr~
Oracle of Destiny 2007-10-01 ch 1,	Yep, all of it is true - I agree with you on all those points you have made about lying (and liars). People who lie don't think about people's reaction and they hurt them in the process. And the person who is being lied to finds it hard to trust them again.
sin olvido 2007-05-08 ch 1,	I'm fairly certain that I've never read any of your work before/after this piece, so I can't tell whether you're rusty or not, but the poem could use some work. Honestly, the form hindered the poem, at least to me. With the rhymes like "Deep and real/Unable to heal," it would have read better as a single line separated by a comma: "Deep and real, unable to heal." But that's optional. This is, after all, your poem. The rhymes, too, were a bit bleh and made the poem sound less of... I don't even know how to describe it. Less mature? But that's not what I mean. I mean that you could do so much more with this theme outside the form and structure of what you already have. I do, however, relate to the poem, which added to the yay factor quite significantly. Liars suck. Keep writing, chica! ~Cristina
Catcher in the Rye 2007-02-22 ch 1,	I really liked the rythem and flow to this one
simpleplan13 2007-02-11 ch 1,	I can relate to that one... niely done
Rosemistress 2007-01-13 ch 1,	i'll be completely honest. it DOES seem slightly rusty. it's not bad, NO! but it is slightly rusty. i'll explain myself: it is lightly confusing, considering that there aren't any "complete" sentences. they are phrases that, when put together, give out a message. that is what's good about it. though there aren't complete sentences, the phrases are still able to give out the message and feeling to it. lightly splashed with anger and dissapointment, spiced up with a "matter-of-fact" attitude. those were the feelings i got after reading it several times [i read poems several times to get the true feeling, hopeful-understanding, and theme, of course]. so, yeah, rusty, but still good ^_^

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