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| Elder Nymph 2007-01-14 ch 1,   | Very nice- You've done a good job illustrating the history of paganism without getting bogged down in specifics. I also like how you've intertwined prose and poetry. On that note, however, I would suggest you consider the poetry maybe as a single unbroken proem and develop it as such, then add the prose between stanzas. The verse is good, but I don't think it has reached its full potential. |